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Post  Aisling Thu Sep 18, 2008 12:50 am

Just one tear,
can't let it fall,
to open a gate,
to the pain that consumes,

Just one shoe,
falls and everything,
everything changes,

Just one storm,
welling up inside,
can't stop the flood,
before i break,

Just one,
one against many,
No, one amidst many,

Just one night,
changes nothing,
bleakness overcomes reality,

Just one more,
moments pile up,
drowning me in their clarity,

Just one breath,
before sinking down,
down into the darkness.

~ Cathryn Aisling

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Post  Jadson Thu Sep 18, 2008 1:04 am

Dark and depressing, like how I feel at the end of every Lemoore work day. I can relate, and it appeals to me. Well composed and intimate.
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Post  raining_roses Sat Sep 20, 2008 12:55 am

Your wording is simple, though i would have liked to see more descriptive wording i like how you made this in simplistic form, beautifully written.
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