It's not over -poetry 2-

There telling me to stop crying
Because were over
But I won’t believe their words
This world is spinning
And I’m still in it
I don’t want to chase you
Yet you’re what my heart calls home
I can’t dream without you
So come to my bedside
Wake me up from this unending nightmare
I know it’s not over…
I can’t live without you
So bring me out of this hell
Reach for my hand
Keep me out of the depths of despair
I know it’s not over…
I can’t breathe without you
Everything is spinning so fast
I’m feeling so very dizzy
Losing air, vision fading
So pick me up off the ground
Breathe life back into me
Carry me back to our home
I know it’s not over…
This world just wouldn’t be right
If we weren’t in it together
I’m rocking back and forth
Screaming and crying
It’s not over
You’re far away
But it’s not over.



Ummm just give me your first thoughts on it, i kinda wrote it in a rush last night i was cooking dinner at the same time and watching the kids so it didnt come out exactly like i wanted it to but i got the main theme so thats all that matters. ( did i do this right Keegan???)

You did fine!

This piece loses itself a few times. But soul spills aren't meant for anything but.. well.. spilling.

keep writing.

hahah yea spilling is what im good at. thanks though!!!

A few grammatical mistakes.
But overall its a good peice, the emotion is there.

~Carrie

thanks carebear!