Life is an Art - Poetry- 3

An artist holds beauty
and grace in their well worn hands.
An arch of a line a soft color
then out of nothing appears the
delicate wing of a butterfly.

Brush stroke weaves a
sea of green that floats out of
their mind. The pureness of
life in its simplest of forms.

This beauty expands to a
horizon in the artist mind.
from charcoal to paint it brings
to life a beauty unmatched.

A frozen memory engraved on
a canvas. The colors appear
vivid and bright parts are
dulled as they introduce the
night.

The viewer of this
painting can feel the cool
wind off the lake of colors,
that are beautifully painted,
the brush strokes hidden
among the artist message.

The sun setting over the willow
trees, its long strands billowing
gently over the lake.
Near the edge is sparkling jewels
that flicker around
in the artist mind. They are beloved
fireflies.

The artist finds this place
of dreams empty, missing a piece of
its soul. A soft smile curves
this artist lips into a smile
of pure joy. The soft bristles
are dipped into a jar of paint,
as the artist carefully begins
to stroke.

The forms are
close side by side.
He placed us both...he
gave us life.

This poem didn't catch my eye really, I read it, but didn't really get anything new from it.

Not that it's poorly written or anything, it just seems lacking something.

Otherwise, done, and done well.

Oh, one last thing:

The lower few stanzas of the piece seem skewed, maybe you copied them wrong?

The lines seem mashed together, punctuation where it should not be. If that was unintentional, it is an easy fix. If it was intentional, I think it might do better more structured than current.

Ultimately up to you.

Take care.

I really liked this poem

I agree with Keegan though, about the punctuation....it kinda throws me off reading it having the periods in the middle of the lines.

But other than that, I enjoyed reading it!!

Nicely done

i should really pay attention to my poems!

first off thanks to you both for commenting on this, i checked over what you said and i will fix it. i agree with keegan also on the not pop out kinda poem. it was something i did to relax myself and such, really wasnt ment to be posted but i had a bout of writers block so i just decided to place that up. had a lot of mixed reviews on this and thanks for not telling me it was good and patting my back. really appreciate the input on this peice thank you both very much.

Nikki